Should We Live in Dormitory?

           Going to be college student is interesting to manage our live by ourselves. Managing our time to study, making friends with others, and choosing a temporary place to live are the matters that often happen to college students. Choosing a place to live in may be so difficult when the candidates are so many. However, it doesn’t exist in President University because our campus offers dormitory as a comfortable place. I believe that all students should choose to live in the dormitory for the advantages that offered. Here are the reasons.

         First, living in the dormitory will provide with a safe life. The dormitory is located close to the main campus. It only takes 5-8 minutes to the campus by walking. Therefore, the students should not take a long journey which means minimising the risks to happen. Additionally, the dormitory also has security service that always maintain the safety such as using CCTV, security men and security women that always keep up till the dawn, and having restricted area for any boys or any girls to enter. Not only that but also the opposite of dormitory is police office that serves us for 24 hours.

          Second, the dormitory has many facilities to support. The dormitory provides sport facilities, public facilities and any personal facilities. Sport facilities that are available in the dormitory are volleyball court, basketball court, outdoor badminton court, and table tennis. Then, mini hall and bucks are the place to gather or do discussion and also mini market. While personal facilities are full-furnished room, shared wi-fi in every room, tv cable, mineral water, and cleaning service. Those facilitates are purposed for the students so that they do not have to go outside to fulfil their necessities.

            Third, most parents will be comfort to leave their child living in the dormitory. Since there are so many facilities that I already stated above, I believe almost all parents will decide to ask their child to live in the dormitory. Parents will seek for any places to live that is comfortable enough and close to the campus. Then the worries level will become more declining for parents since the safety is fully considered in dormitory area.

          Even though the dormitory rent fee is expensive, but the benefits that you experience will be worth. The fee is including all cost for maintenance and paying the human resources that provided by the management. We can do complaining for 24 hours if there is any wrongdoing or damage. Similar to the quotes that sometimes I partly agree “Money can buy happiness”. Thus, high rent fee is not really matter for those who need to be satisfy.

         In conclusion, I believe that living in the dormitory gives so many benefits for all students. Due to the dormitory offers us a learning opportunity without any worries, because of the existence of some facilities. It makes your study will become more comfortable.

(nz)

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6 thoughts on “Should We Live in Dormitory?

  1. Hi Iva! What a great post you have here.. i also agree that students should live in dormitory.. However, i found some mistakes in your writings

    First, “Going to be college student is interesting to manage our live by ourselves” should be more understandable if you write it like “As a college student, it is always interesting to manage our live by ourselves”

    “First, living in the dormitory will provide with a safe life” >> “First, living in the dormitory will provide a safe life”

    “minimising the risks to happen.” here i think you should give specific example of the risk that might happen.. 🙂

    Overall good job!!

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  2. Hello Aktivani!
    You have written such a nice essay. It is simple and really enjoyable to read. Although, I have some suggestions for your essay here
    – first paragraph: you might add “a” before “college” in “to be college student ”
    – first paragraph: you might revise “the candidates are so many’ to ” there are so many options”
    – first paragraph: you might add “to live/stay” after “as a comfortable place”
    – second paragraph: you might revise “has security service that always maintain the safety such as using CCTV, security men and security women” to “provides security services that always maintain the safety such as CCTV s, security officers…”
    – second paragraph: you might revise “Not only that but also the opposite of dormitory is…” to “Not only that, the opposite of dormitory is…”
    – third paragraph: you should use “places” in “are the place to”
    – fourth paragraph: you might revise “will become more declining” to “will become to the minimum”
    I hope you can consider my suggestions and it can help you, Aktivani!

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  3. Hi Aktivani! Nice to see your post again. I also agree with your thesis statement. But, I disagree with this statement; “Thus, high rent fee is not really matter for those who need to be satisfy.” I think it’s better to say; “Thus, high rent fee does not really matter for those who need to be satisfied.” Overall, your work is great. Looking forward to your next post 😉

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  4. as expected from iva, i was having difficulties in finding errors on your writing, somehow i found some error, but already mentioned above. maybe i could add one
    in the very first sentence “going to be (a) college student is interesting”

    that just my opinion, please frogive me if im wrong, im also still learning 😉

    psstt komen blog aku juga yaa vaa wkwkw

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  5. Hi, Aktivani! I love reading your post, it’s light to read and I want to read more and more. However, I do have some suggestion for you that you might want to change 🙂
    1. it’s better to be “Going to be a college student is interesting to manage our life by ourselves.” add an “a” and change live into “life”
    2. I guess it’d be better to be ” First, living in the dormitory will provide with a safe environment.” rather than using the word ‘life’.
    3. It’ll better like this: By that, parent will be less worry about their children since the safety is fully considered in dormitory. rather than “Then the worries level will become more declining for parents since the safety is fully considered in dormitory area”.

    I think that will be all. I cannot wait for your next post, Naza! Cheers, xx

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  6. As a college student, it is always interesting to manage our live by ourselves. Managing our time to study, making friends with others, and choosing a temporary place to live are the matters that often happen to college students. Choosing a place to live in may be so difficult when the options are so many. However, it doesn’t exist in President University because our campus offers dormitory as a comfortable place to stay. I believe that all students should choose to live in the dormitory for the advantages that offered. Here are the reasons.

    First, living in the dormitory will provide a safe environment. The dormitory is located close to the main campus. It only takes 5-8 minutes to the campus by walking. Therefore, the students should not take a long journey which means minimising the risks to happen. Additionally, the dormitory also has security service that always maintain the safety such as using CCTVs, security men and security women that always keep up till the dawn, and having restricted area for any boys or any girls to enter. Not only that but also the opposite of dormitory is police office that serves us for 24 hours.

    Second, the dormitory has many facilities to support. The dormitory provides sport facilities, public facilities and any personal facilities. Sport facilities that are available in the dormitory are volleyball court, basketball court, outdoor badminton court, and table tennis. Then, mini hall and bucks are the place to gather or do discussion and also mini market. While personal facilities are full-furnished room, shared wi-fi in every room, tv cable, mineral water, and cleaning service. Those facilitates are purposed for the students so that they do not have to go outside to fulfil their necessities.

    Third, most parents will be comfort to leave their child living in the dormitory. Since there are so many facilities that I already stated above, I believe almost all parents will decide to ask their child to live in the dormitory. Parents will seek for any places to live that is comfortable enough and close to the campus. By that, the parents will be less worry since the safety is fully considered in dormitory area.

    Even though the dormitory rent fee is expensive, but the benefits that you experience will be worth. The fee is including all cost for maintenance and paying the human resources that provided by the management. We can do complaining for 24 hours if there is any wrongdoing or damage. Similar to the quotes that sometimes I partly agree “Money can buy happiness”. Thus, high rent fee does not really matter for those who need to be satisfy.

    In conclusion, I believe that living in the dormitory gives so many benefits for all students. Due to the dormitory offers us a learning opportunity without any worries, because of the existence of some facilities. It makes your study will become more comfortable.

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