Go Reach Them!

Goal 1: Improving my writing skills in order to preparing to write thesis.

Goal 2: Increasing my IELTS score.

Goal 3: Able to fluently communicate in English in the future job.

            One of important subject in 8th semester is English IV. English IV teaches us academic writing, so it always challenges us to do brainstorming once a week. However, I am not only attending the class by sitting down in the class for nothing, but also I hope I can pass this subjects which requires 3 credits. By passing these 3 credits, I believe I can reach the goals that I set such as improving my writing skills in order to preparing to write thesis, increasing IELTS score and able to fluently communicate in English in the future job.

           Up to now, I think learning English IV has helped me to improve my writing skills in order to preparing to write thesis. Previously, I already knew that before we write the essay, we need to do pre-writing which consists of brainstorming. That was all I knew. I wrote the essay based on the outline I had made, but the supporting sentence still did not relate to the topic sentence. Thus, the paragraph might become not coherent. However, right now my knowledge about writing is increased due to learning in the class. Not only that but also weekly assignment gives us a lot of chance to practice. By learning in the class and practicing, I believe it supports to prepare writing thesis.

        According to C.S Lewis, he said that “You are never too old to set another goal or to dream a new dream”, I believe that increasing IELTS as my other goals is not too late. Probably some people already took an IELTS test and got high score before they continue their study in the university. For me, even I ever took IELTS test and got only 4.5 when I was in 11th grade, I think by learning English IV is not too late to help me in the next IELTS test. I am planning to take IELTS test when I become a fresh-graduated. Thus, learning English IV can help me to learn about writing to prepare my IELTS test.

              5 out of 9 companies in Indonesia are foreign companies that requires us to fluently communicate in English will pay its employee high, I personally think English IV can help me to fulfil future job requirement. In Indonesia, the most companies that willing to pay you high are mostly foreign companies. In addition, according to The World’s Largest Ranking of Countries by English Skills which conducted by EF United Kingdom, Indonesia is categorized as moderate proficiency that takes place as 32 out of 72 countries that use English as their second language. I should have a good competence in communicating with English to fulfil the requirements. Therefore, learning English IV which tells us how to write formally can help to communicate with my partner in the future job.

              In conclusion, I have 3 goals which should be achieved after finishing this subject. Those three are important to support my future career. Not only that but also adopting myself with the dynamic world that always becomes more advanced.

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12 thoughts on “Go Reach Them!

  1. Hi Aktivani!
    it is always a pleasure for me to read your blog! Also you have such impressive goals in English 4 subject. Well, I have a question for you, aren’t we suppose to write a letter that will be opened in the end of semester? Because I think we should write based on the example and assignment in our English book right? ehehehe.

    Anyway, I have some suggestion for you that I think will make you writing better in this post. First, I think in the words “has helped me to improve my…” should be revised to “has helped me improving my…” since it’s more simple. “The” in the sentence “I already knew that before we write the essay” would sounds better if you change it into “an essay”. In the 3rd paragraph, you also wrote “some people already took” would be better if you wrote “some people had taken” or “some people took” and in the sentence “for me, even I ever took” would be better if you wrote “for me, even I had taken”. Last is “when I became a fresh-graduated” would sounds so much better if you wrote “When I have finished my bachelor degree” or “When I graduate soon”

    I hope you don’t mind that I gave you some suggestions for your writing, I can’t wait to see you on your next posts Va! I hope you achieved all the goals that you chose today:)

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  2. Hi Iva!
    What a piece of impressive writing you have here. But I do agree with Rinjani’s suggestion. Overall, I love the fact that you add some knowledgeable information in your writing. Looking forward for your next post!

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  3. Hi, Aktivani! I really enjoy reading your new post. Anyway I have some suggestion you’d might want to read:
    1. I think it will be better if you change it into “Able to communicate fluently in English in the future job.”
    2. I think it’s better for “I believe it supports to prepare writing thesis.” turn into ” I believe it will support me in preparing my thesis later.”
    3. Fulfil should be fulfill.
    I guess you should click ‘proof-reading’ before you publish your next post later on because I’m so excited to read yours. I hope you do agree with my suggestion. Cheers, xx

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  4. Hi iva,
    Nice to read your writing. I agree with the previous comment, but I want to at one thing, ‘use’ in this sentence ‘Indonesia is categorized as moderate proficiency that takes place as 32 out of 72 countries that use English as their second language’ suppose to be ‘uses’.
    Your topic sentence was supported the topic sentence and you have also the conclusion sentence.
    That’s all according to me but your writing was improved from previous. ^_^
    Kindly visit and leave comment on my blog too.^_^

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  5. Hi Aktivani! Nice to see your post again. I enjoy your writing as it is clear and understandable. But, I have some suggestions to you:
    – “….and got high score…” should be “…..and got a high score….”
    – “…foreign companies that requires us…” should be “…foreign companies that require us…” since ‘foreign companies’ is plural.
    Keep writing and looking forward to your next post!

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  6. Hi Iva…
    Nice to see your new post. As usual, you have a clear point about your writings…
    Actually, I think there are some grammar errors…
    for the first and second paragraph,

    One of important subject in 8th semester is English IV. English IV teaches us academic writing, so it is always challenging us to do brainstorming once a week. However, I am not only attending the class by sitting down in the class for nothing, but also I hope I can pass this subject which requires 3 credits. By passing these 3 credits, I believe I can reach the goals that I set such as improving my writing skills in order to prepare to write a thesis, increasing IELTS scores and able to fluently communicate in English in the future job.

    Up to now, I think learning English IV has helped me to improve my writing skills in order to prepare to write a thesis. Previously, I already knew that before we write the essay, we need to do pre-writing which consists of brainstorming. That was all I knew. I wrote the essay based on the outline I had made, but the supporting sentence still did not relate to the topic sentence. Thus, the paragraph might become not coherent. However, right now my knowledge about writing is increased due to learning in the class. Not only that, but also the weekly assignment gives us a lot of chances to practice. By learning in the class and practicing, I believe it supports to prepare writing thesis.

    Hope you can get my point in it hahahaha…, Correct me if I wrong!
    See you on the next post!

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  7. Hi, Aktivani! I hope you can achieve your goals in the future ahead.
    I want to make some suggestions but it’s all already mentioned by people above. Overall, you’ve done a great job by put some informations in your essay.^^

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  8. Hi Aktivanii!!
    What an impressive post you have here! I think you successfully elaborate your points since you make it so coherent and you also use some persuasive paragraph. Although I have some suggestion to make your writings even better.
    – For this sentence “One of important subject in 8th semester is English IV” I think you should change ‘subject’ to ‘subjects’.
    – For this sentence “I can pass this subjects” that ‘subjects’ should be ‘subject’.
    – For this sentence “in order to preparing to write thesis.” How about you make it like this “in order to prepare for my thesis”.
    I hope you will get higher score for your IELTS test after learning English IV! Good luck 😀
    Gonna see you in your next post!

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  9. ivaa what a great piece of writing you have here.
    your writing already good. somehow there are some grammar error that already mentioned by other’s comment. so i just want to help you to reach 10 comments wkwk
    good luck ivaa

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  10. Hi Aktivani 😀 what a good post you have here. The way you write is easy to understand. And i do agree with Rinjani. We suppose to write a letter to ourselves about our goals in academic writing class.. hehe but overall i love your post.
    Keep writing and i’ll see you on your next post:D

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  11. Hi iva… it is nice letter for yourself.. i hope you can achieve all of your goals and always do the best 😀

    I found some mistakes in grammar and some not proper words, but after read the previous comments, what I found already mentioned in those comments. I just hope that you will do revision and make a better post

    but overall you have a good and understandable post 😀

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  12. Goal 1: Improving my writing skills in order to preparing to write thesis.

    Goal 2: Increasing my IELTS score.

    Goal 3: Able to fluently communicate in English in the future job.

    Dear me,

    One of important subjects in 8th semester is English IV. English IV teaches us academic writing, so it always challenges us to do brainstorming once a week. However, I am not only attending the class by sitting down in the class for nothing, but also I hope I can pass this subject which requires 3 credits. By passing these 3 credits, I believe I can reach the goals that I set such as improving my writing skills in order to preparing to write thesis, increasing IELTS score and able to communicate fluently in English in the future job.

    Up to now, I think learning English IV has helped me improving my writing skills in order to preparing for my thesis. Previously, I already knew that before we write the essay, we need to do pre-writing which consists of brainstorming. That was all I knew. I wrote the essay based on the outline I had made, but the supporting sentence still did not relate to the topic sentence. Thus, the paragraph might become not coherent. However, right now my knowledge about writing is increased due to learning in the class. Not only that but also weekly assignment gives us a lot of chance to practice. By learning in the class and practicing, I believe it supports to prepare in writing thesis.

    According to C.S Lewis, he said that “You are never too old to set another goal or to dream a new dream”, I believe that increasing IELTS as my other goals is not too late. Probably some people already took an IELTS test and got high score before they continue their study in the university. For me, even I ever took IELTS test and got only 4.5 when I was in 11th grade, I think by learning English IV is not too late to help me in the next IELTS test. I am planning to take IELTS test when I graduate soon. Thus, learning English IV can help me to learn about writing to prepare my IELTS test.

    5 out of 9 companies in Indonesia are foreign companies that requires us to communicate fluently in English will pay its employee high, I personally think English IV can help me to fulfill future job requirement. In Indonesia, the most companies that willing to pay you high are mostly foreign companies. In addition, according to The World’s Largest Ranking of Countries by English Skills which conducted by EF United Kingdom, Indonesia is categorized as moderate proficiency that takes place as 32 out of 72 countries that uses English as their second language. I should have a good competence in communicating with English to fulfill the requirements. Therefore, learning English IV which tells us how to write formally can help to communicate with my partner in the future job.

    In conclusion, I have 3 goals which should be achieved after finishing this subject. Those three are important to support my future career. Not only that but also adopting myself with the dynamic world that always becomes more advanced.

    Like

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